Short expression of pain
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Started by Lt.SkndHoney_01
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Mar 2008
Lt.SkndHoney_01
sacramento, CA
If you read, please comment, that will make me very happy...
Also this is my first thread post.
The tears are consistant, like a cascading line of fire,
With all of the emotions, shes vulnerable, and exposed are her deep desires,
The mystique no longer remains, and etiquacy has long since past,
Her dreams have ran away, and everything she lives for is proceeding fast,
She gives up on hope, because without him the high will begin to descend,
Its either him or her, and shes love smitten, so her future she gives to him,
Closing the doors, of fascination, and the glamorous achievement,
For him she gave her world, although he couldnt see it.
[original piece from Mz. Honey [Miela]
written Jan. 5 2008 at 1:05 am]
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thank you, I was bored, and so yeah... one of my short poems...
#3
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It’s an awesome first post. You definitely have talent. Keep up the good work!
#5
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That came from boredom? Ma chere, I'd love to see what you'd come up with when you actually try!
That's really hot, mami. It seems that you have put a lot of heart and emotion into that poem. Keep it up, mami.
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SuperFly wrote:Sounds like dat nukka got up in yo' head...
But this one wasn't written because of him,
I was just bored...
so I wrote.
Thank you guys so much!!!
Im kinda embarassed now 
it took me forever just to let the people closest to me hear one of my old poems.
