Rapper's Delight

I kinda bored right now so, I decided I would make a thread designed specifically fo original rap lyrics. I kno that I'm not tha only one who writes lyrics as a hobby, sum even more than that. I write personally for my own pleasure. Right now I'm tryinto get sum money together to make an album (Not anything reel big jus sumthin I can share wit my peoples). Well I'll start tha ish out, tell me what yall think. P.S.(If you don't lik it FUKK U :evil: :evil: j/p)

*In Simon voice* THAT WAS ABSOLUTELYYYY HORRIBLEEEE, KEEP RAPPIN' LIKE THAT AND YOU'LL BE RAPPIN' UNDER THE SUBWAY TRYIN' 2 BUM SOMEONE FOR LOOSE CHANGE!!! J/P *RUNS UP AND GIVES U DAPZ* BOIII YANNO, I'M JUST PLAYIN' DON'T START CRYIN (CUZ I CAN FIGHT MAYUNNN...LOL ) IT'S OTAYYY, MAYBE CHANGE IT UP A LIL' THOUGH CUZ U KINDA REPEATIN' YASELF UP TOP (NO HARD FEELINGS).

Hmm, it was kinda corny. Your rhymes were elementary, (tips... lips, limbs... timbs) Also, you seem to be in the every line has to rhyme state. Thas not necessarily the way you ought to go cuz in the long run that stifles you. The more unconventional your flow is the more you get noticed. Basically just broaden your range up and please, lets move away from the killing thing. Thas not for everybody.

/\/\/\/\/\......I kinda expected all that. I put this one out for yall to see because tha rhyme scheme was easy to notice. Not all of my rhymes are that *elementary*, this is not near my best work. I was also writin' to a certain beat.(Bravehearts-Quick to Back Down). No hard feelings, as I said before, I do it all for fun. Most of tha rhymes on guns and killin' are metaphors about my lyrical ability (tote enough clips within my lips.. ...got flows on hair trigger ni99as say I bust too much). It's soo easy to judge, but I created this post really to see others works, rhymes.....and from the response it has gotten, I guess nobody has any. (so yall can FREE POST if ya want)

i write poetry i don't flow you see So i'ma free-post this bi+ch Stoic-ly without the smile on my face that was about to take place when 'Givafukk articulated your flow's disgrace :arrow:

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ummm work on the lyrics but u got a good start

freepost #3

we've had a cypha post b4 but i guess i could key su'n up in a lil...i'm thirsty right now tho maybe 2morrow i'm bout 2 sleep fter i get some milk

It's Supposed To Be Hip Hop Night Too Thugged Out can't Get inside/ No GYMS No JEANS and it's Hip Hop Night!/ Snatched the Heat off the Block for the Beef Tonight/ Man, I don't think they REALLY want Beef Tonight/ It's cold outside I can't take it no more Cats pullin up in fly whips galour They just let that N!GGA IN..I was here BEFORE Man, F*CK PLAYNG GAMES, LET'S RUSH THE DOOR!!!!!!!